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There are certain hazards when living with a serial killer.  Unfortunately for Mali, he was not aware that those hazards extended to the kitchen.

"Hey Danny boy, I'm going to get myself some ice cream, do you want-"  What had started off as a normal question ended in more of a scream.  "What the hell is that?"  

Daniel looked over from the couch, and upon seeing his boyfriend's reaction he stood and walked lazily into the kitchen.  "What's what?"

Mali pointed inside of the freezer.  "That!  What the hell is that thing?"

"Oh."  Daniel's casual reaction was a stark contrast to Mali's complete and total spazzing.  "That would be a hand."

"I see that!"

"Well then why did you as-"

"What the hell is a severed hand doing in our freezer?"

"It's freezing.  You don't want to keep these things just laying around, they'll get all-"

"You don't keep them in the freezer either!"

Daniel crossed his arms.  "Are you even going to let me complete a sentence, or are you going to keep overreacting about everything?"

"I'm not overreacting!  Daniel there is a severed hand next to the ice cream!"

"It's in a plastic bag."

"It's a severed hand!"

"That it is."

"What the hell are you going to do with a severed hand?  Why did you even keep that?"

"I thought maybe I could use it for something."  Daniel looked thoughtful for a few seconds.  "I'm not really sure actually."

"So you're keeping it?"

"Well yeah."

"In the freezer?"

"Obviously."

"Next to food?"

"It looks that way.  Is there... something wrong with that?  You seem distressed."

Mali stared at Daniel, wondering how the hell he had come to think this was an acceptable thing to do.  "AAAUUUUUGH!"

"So I take it-"

"I'm going out for ice cream! I can't eat that!"  Mali slammed the freezer door shut and stalked off to grab his coat.  

"Well if you're going out can you pick me up-"

"NO!"
The Trouble With Serial Killers

The title was too short for the last s, but I didn't feel like coming up with another title.

Daniel belongs to me, Mali belongs to =Angie-Chan070707, she just lets me play with him.
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CandyCoatedLSD Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this is amazing. XD... I LOVE this!

I definitely wouldn't mind being with a serial killer :3
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awgeez28 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010
Hee, hee, hee... So how much of this is Mali willing to put with is the question I guess?
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onnawufei Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010
Oh he'll put up with an awful lot. :giggle: But Daniel is generally pretty good about knowing when to stop. That is when he realizes he's doing something wrong anyway. >_>
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ebkido Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010  Student Photographer
NEXT TO THE FOOD!?!? - Oh noes! xD
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NightmarePain Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
bwahahahahahahahahaha!!!! thats freakin hilarious!!!!
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angrymeatball Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
While the piece is rather entertaining, you're lacking a bit in details. The dialogue carries the whole thing, which isn't bad, but you might want to be a little descriptive in the future.
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onnawufei Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010
Thank you very much for the critique! :)

When I was younger I used to be huge on descriptions, but for some reason I've really moved away from that in the past few years. I definitely need to work on it.
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angrymeatball Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.

If you don't mind me also saying, I'm not getting much of a serial killer vibe from your character. I've done some work on the subject myself, and a serial killer won't just collect body parts. If they are collecting them, there's a reason behind it, even if only as a trophy, and they get very defensive of them. Kind of like a prized possession.
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onnawufei Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010
Oh this was just something silly that I'd written for giggles based loosely on a piece of art my friend had done, Daniel doesn't actually collect body parts. If he did he certainly wouldn't be keeping them in the freezer downstairs since he has a room upstairs where he does his dismembering and whatnot.
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angrymeatball Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Just saying. I may not be violent at the moment, but I do qualify for the title of "sociopath", so just pointing a few things out.
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